English End-of-year exam 2002 essay

(Dated 7 October 2002 by me)

I scored 40/60 (66.67%) for this. They are mostly spelling & phrasing errors. Words are added if the sentence is not clear or the original is censored for privicy reasons when possible.

I feel that I can improve on this, but since this is an archive, I would just highlight the errors.

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A Surprise

During the December holidays, one of my friends, John, was walking towards me while I was on the way to the Community Center to fetch my younger brother from his tuition classes.

John greeted me and said that all of his friends are planing a surprise birthday party for my friend, James, whose birthday falls next fortnight. He also said to me that he would start planing tommorow.

My younger brother's tuition class had ended and we went straight home, thinkig about the plan.

The next morning, I went stright to John's house and said that James had never had a surprise party before and decides to change the venue to my house. We also decide to pretend that we had forgotten his birthday whenever he is around us.

During his birthday, we presuaded him to come to my house and pretended that we were going to play games at my house.

After he entered the house, people hiding all over the house surprised him and James was so surprised that he opened his mouth for a moment.

He was so happy that he wanted a surprise party.

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7 October 2002

Dear Johan

I had receved a letter that says that you are visiting me in December.

I will look after you as if you are my friend if you want me to. During your visit, you will be staying at my house.

During your stay, we would be visiting places like Place A, Place B, Place C.

I would be very happy into seeing you.

Best regards

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Name

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